Forbidden

Black clouds formed above the forest. Swirls of black and grey intertwining above the Earth. Shadows fell upon the land. Flames arose from the ground as the shadows brushed upon it. Trees would scream as fire crawled up its bark. Animals fled the forest hoping to excape the infurno.
In the middle of the forest, where the fire has not touched yet, stood two figures. The were standing in a protective stance, staring at each other.
The figure on the right, a man, had dark silky black hair, waving just past his nose. Behind his back, standing 8 feet above his head, were wings. They were black and ragged like they caught fire many years ago.
The other figure, a female, shood holding her gaze on the man. Her long ,blonde, sparkleing hair swayed in the breeze behind her. Behind her back, above her head, also were wings. Hers were a silver color with a golden tint to them. Every feather perfevtly intact.
They both turned in the direction of where the fire was blazing further away. They knew what was coming. They knew it was bound to happen, but when? They did not know.
The boy turned back to the girl, " you knew this would happen. Why do you still insist on trying to stop me?"
The girl snapped her head in his direction and snarled, " why would I just sit and let it happen? It is my job to protect him." They heard the sound of crackleing trees, proving it was making its way to their location. " We can't stay here or we will burn to ash." She reaches her hand towards him, " please Flint, stop this madness."
He looks at her hand then to her. He extends his hand only to slap hers away, " I will not join you. That would be madness in its integrity." He smirks at her, " why would I join you when I almost have everyone's future in my hand. I would be mad not to keep it at that." He pulls out a dagger and slices her pale face, leaving a cut on her cheek, " you are weak. Usless to me and everyone else. Don't you see Spyder, I am in control here, not anyone else."
Spyder stared at him astonished. She touched her cheek where Flint cut her, " you would betray us all, just to control him?"
He smirked, raising his dagger. He answered her by pushing her several feet away from him. She was shocked by his reaction. When he started running at her with his dagger raised, she jumped out of the way. He kept lunging at her, trying to pierce her heart.
She ran to the trees. She could make out the flames eating away at the trees. She ran up a nearby tree. It was really tall. She stopped on a branch, clinging to the tree hoping she doesn't get spotted by him. She pulls out a dagger of her own. It is silver and has a dragon wrapped around the handle.
Flint laughs, " you can't hide Spyder. I'll always find you. I can hear your heart beating. I smell the blood running through your heart." He njhhhhhmhj pine tree. He jumps towards it, cutting it in half. Nothing.
Spyder jumped out from behind the tree, running towards Flint. She lifted her dagger delicately. Flint had his back to her, not knowing she was running at him. She caught him around the throte, putting her dagger to his throte.
He looked at her, shock in his eyes. She took a deep breath, " forgive me, brother." She dragged the dagger across his throte.

tell me how ya'll like it so far ^_^ be honest

It's pretty amazing, besides one spelling mistake I spotted "throte" should be "throat". By the way, you should put it on fictionpress.com No one reads stories on here anymore. I started posting my original story (which I need to update but lost interest in writing it) on there after I figured out how to post my fanfictions on fanfiction.net

~LatiasFan19

Wow, you use such darkness in your writing, reminds me of a Zelda videogame :D Sounds awesome, when you finish, could you e-mail me a copy.... ericstrd@aol.com thanks :D

-Eric

thanks guys for your input any yeah i didn't really check for spelling mistakes i wanted to see how it was first. and yeah eric i will send you it. my friend at school said it wasn't good and so i wanted to see if she was right or wrong. plus i love using darkness in all my stories because i don't believe in happy endings unless it involves alot of blood. because if you look at all the movies and stories we read, how many would ever happen meaning how many times will you fall in love the very first time when your a teen and it actually work out? so far i know noone who is still with there first love. truly (well in my life anyway) there is nothing but darkness. but thank you all any way and i'll go to the website right now ^_^

EeveeLover wrote:

thanks guys for your input any yeah i didn't really check for spelling mistakes i wanted to see how it was first. and yeah eric i will send you it. my friend at school said it wasn't good and so i wanted to see if she was right or wrong. plus i love using darkness in all my stories because i don't believe in happy endings unless it involves alot of blood. because if you look at all the movies and stories we read, how many would ever happen meaning how many times will you fall in love the very first time when your a teen and it actually work out? so far i know noone who is still with there first love. truly (well in my life anyway) there is nothing but darkness. but thank you all any way and i'll go to the website right now ^_^

Your welcome X) This would also make a great anime(: lol ^-^ You would make an awesome writer.:D

Palto Eric or Tyler wrote:

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Your welcome X) This would also make a great anime(: lol ^-^ You would make an awesome writer.:D

my plan was to make it an anime :) that's why i wrote it. I love writing it's helps me express myself. I one day hope to become a writer, but I don't have a way to post stuff. So I post stuff on here and see what ppl think.:) Thanks for your input, it really helps. I f you could, try and get some of your friends on here and read it too please.:)

EeveeLover wrote:

<quoted text>my plan was to make it an anime :) that's why i wrote it. I love writing it's helps me express myself. I one day hope to become a writer, but I don't have a way to post stuff. So I post stuff on here and see what ppl think.:) Thanks for your input, it really helps. I f you could, try and get some of your friends on here and read it too please.:)

Okay(: I will get my friends to support it!:D Great story(:

great story

It is an awesome story(: So dark :D My favorite genre(:

i love dark stories too. :) And thaanks for your support. :)

EeveeLover wrote:

i love dark stories too.:) And thaanks for your support.:)

Me too(: Your Welcome :D

Palto Eric or Tyler wrote:

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Me too(: Your Welcome :D

i also got to aprove it with my friend first before i can make more

Lol Can't wait to read it :D